So, like, whatsa adverb?

August 31, 2010

The author looked at me with venom in her eyes. Sizing her up, I was fairly certain she could take me. Easily. “I have NEVER had anyone talk about my writing and my sentence structure the way you have! I don’t know anything about POV shifts, run-on sentences, or adverbs. Nor do I know what show vs. tell means. Furthermore, I don’t care! I am an artist and  ‘rules’ hinder the literary process. So piss off.”

While my jaw hung slack in my lap, she gathered her things. “Um, yes rules can hinder the literary process, ” I said, gathering up my chin. “However, there are some ‘rules’ that exist for a reason, and that’s to make the story easier for the reader to follow – effective communication. With all the POV shifts, it was hard for me to keep up. The severe case of adverbatosis created a ka-thunk cadence that cluttered the writing. And your run-on sentences made the message unclear…”

Her icy glare slid down her long nose and settled on me with a bad case of frostbite. “I think there is nothing wrong with my writing.”

“Yabut, I don’t believe it’s marketable as written.” How lame did I feel by this time?

“I’ll be happy to accept your apology when I get a five book deal,” she sniffed before storming out of the room.

That was a a one-on-one that took place five years ago at at a writer’s con, and I have yet to see her name in lights.

Here’s the long and short of it:  You’re a writer, so doesn’t it seem logical that learning how to use the tools of your trade is, like, IMPORTANT? It’s like a surgeon who isn’t concerned about learning how to use a scalpel. “Hey, no problemo, let’s just dig his tonsils out with a spoon.” Gah.

It flies in the face of logic that any writer would be unconcerned about learning any kind of writing rules, yet I see signs of this ignorance every day. Yes, you heard me – IGNORANCE, which means the condition of being uneducated, unaware, or uninformed.

Thankfully, this isn’t a fatal disease. One can go from being ignorant to being informed and aware in no time. The only way this is fatal is E-G-O, which has little place in this business. In fact, every literary tackle box is spring-loaded to launch an author’s ego right out of the zip code. It’s called a rejection letter.

But on the flip side, I’ve seen authors whose hands felt tied behind their backs because they were so concerned about “writing right” that it hogtied them into a literary coma. In this, I enthusiastically prescribe to my shoe-loving across-the-ponder Nicola Morgan, who screams from on high to just sit down, shut up, and write. Brava, Morgan – go buy yourself some wicked lavender colored boots.

It’s a case of balance. Write with abandon, but eventually waggle your eye on whether you’re meeting basic writing needs. Of course it’s all a matter of personal taste. For instance, I’m not a fan of excessive adverbs because I think they create a ka-thunk cadence, they’re lazy, and lean toward telling rather than showing.  Someone else may feel quite differently. Balance tends to cast a wider net. But in order to strike that balance, you gotta know da rules.

As for the haughty author? I had the last laugh since the event organizers sent me a check for the one-on-ones, which came out of the fee she paid. So in essence I got paid $60 to hear her blather about her extreme coolness.


Ignorant is as ignorant does

August 30, 2010

This from. If you don’t read this blog, you’re missing a barrel of laughs along with some sage advice.

Dear agent, first of all, let me tell you that I have applied for a copyright for my book, so I hope you will respect that.

Curses! Without a copyright I would have outsourced your book idea to India, where a team of writers would carefully plagiarize it and then hand it back over to me. After which, I would put my name on it as author and ride it to glorious bestsellerdom.

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I know, sounds silly, right? But I get a fair number of queries that say roughly the same thing. And my thoughts are those of the agent…what? I can’t copy this manuscript on every bathroom wall from here to Texas? Quell bummer…

I know it sounds snobby, but it’s a huge turnoff when authors do “ignernt” things. I guess that’s why I love SlushyHell so much – the replies reflect the frustration we feel at the myriad of blunders. All my life I’ve always gone to an interview prepared. I knew about the business which I hoped would hire me, I dressed nicely (even brushed mah teeth), and had a complete resume in hand. Given that, I have the same expectations of those who query me.

Other blunders that make me yell for the beagle to fire up the blender:

  • “You may look at my website for further information.” Oh…you mean like finding out the PLOT???
  • “I’ve decided that agents are a total waste and out to steal my money, so I’m querying you directly.” Don’t they know I’ll steal their money, too? KIDDING! Yes, rethink that opening line.
  • “Fiction novel…” Fingernails on a chalkboard.
  • “Dear Ms. Behler…” Le sigh. I have no idea why this bothers me so much (calling Dr. Fraud), but it may be that my name is plastered on our submission guidelines. If they didn’t read my name, what else didn’t they read?
  • Email account. This is important, oddly enough. When a query comes in from Ozzie and [email protected], I wonder if these are co-authors or it’s the family account. I admit that my brain runs on empty most of the time, but when I hit reply and type in “Dear…” I have to scroll down to find out whether it’s Ozzie or Harriet. Have your own email account in your name for your queries. An agent’s or editor’s email shouldn’t be rummaging around with email from your kids telling you they’re spending the night at Tommy McFarty’s because Tommy’s mom is serving ice cream for dinner.
  • And speaking of email…turn off your spam protector. No agent or editor with a heartbeat (assuming we actually have one) is going to fill out a request for you to receive our emails. Evah.
  • “I know you asked for an attachment, but I put my entire three chapters in the body of this email because I didn’t want to lose the formatting.” Um. If I wanted it in the body of the email, I’d have asked for it that way. At the risk of sounding snobby again, I have to say that the author queried me. That suggests I may have something they want, so doesn’t it go to reason that she would comply with my request of an attachment? It’s not that I’m arbitrary, but I have a specific reason for asking for an attachment. I put these on my Kindle. Instead, I have to copy and paste the entire three chapters into a Word file, then send it to my Kindle account. If I lose the formatting, I have to put it back in. The question is – will I? I may. But I’ll go ahead and read all the other partials first, leaving this author to wait a long time.
  • “I’m querying you because you specialize in Fantasy…” Eh? Whazzat? I do? Dammit, I hate it when I don’t get the memo. BEAGLE!!! This doesn’t even warrant a rejection. I simply delete it because I know the author is simply going down a list of editors and blindly emailing queries. The danger with this process is that a nice slurpy vanity press may bite, and BINGO, the author is reeled in like a fresh trout.
  • “I’ve sent out hundreds of queries. Please look at my work.” Yessiree…is there anything that sez lovin’ like being the last one to be asked to dance? Being last in line and being begged to dance is such a turnoff that I find myself gargling with Draino. Hello, Ms. Delete button.

The point isn’t to mock, but to point out what agents and editors endure every day. It shouldn’t be difficult to see how many of us are able to parse the query pile into a more manageable beast.If authors looked at queries as a job interview, perhaps they wouldn’t be quite so cavalier or massively ill-prepared.


Reading your competition

August 29, 2010

I received a number of queries that piqued my interest, so I did what any good, black-hearted, soulless editor does and asked for a full proposal that included title comps. Most of the authors sent exactly what I’d asked for because they knew the elements that go into a full proposal. They came to the party prepared.

Show me da comps!

One proposal was pretty well filled in, but didn’t list any title comps.  So I contacted the author. “Oh,” sez Mr. Author, “I don’t have any. See, I didn’t read anything that was comparable to my book because I didn’t want other books to influence my writing.”

Let me just say that not providing an agent or editor with information they requested is noobish  (someone who doesn’t know what he doesn’t know – and doesn’t care) because it makes us wonder what they’re hiding. It’s unprofessional because we expect writers to come to the party prepared. After all, you queried us, right?

In this case, I wasn’t sure whether the author’s  lack of title comps was a true fear of being influenced by someone else’s writing, or whether he was too lazy to do any outside reading. I know, it sounds strange not to do any reading in the genre one writes, but you’d be amazed at the number of people who think up an idea and write it.

Do you have a story?

This head in the sand stuff drives me buggy because the author has no clue as to whether he even has a marketable story. Whazzat, Price? you screech. Bear with me.

We’d all like to think our imaginations rock and roll and we can crank out a great story. But until we have something to compare it to, we don’t really know, do we? I’ve mentioned this before, but years ago I had a guy send me a story that sounded eerily like J0hn Grisham’s The Rainmaker. When I brought this coinhinkydinky to his attention, he wrote back: “who’s John Grisham?”

Facepalm. I’d like to think he was pulling my leg, but I’ve encountered many queries where the story was either cliche, or it’s been done a thousand times already (hello, vampire romance, teen angst, cancer, and biopolar disorder).

Case in point: I discussed an author’s cancer book with her a couple years ago. I pointed out that there wasn’t anything in her book that hadn’t already been discussed in countless other books. She was genuinely shocked at my comments…until she went out and read a couple cancer books. She wrote back, chagrined, to say that, wow, she really didn’t have a story after all. Aside from the possible catharsis provided by writing her book, it was a total waste of time. I can’t think of a worse fate. And all she had to do was simply reach out and read her competition.

Saturation

And knowing your competition can help the smart author determine whether the marketplace is saturated. When DaVinci Code came out, I thought I’d lose my ever-livin’ mind with the plethora of knockoffs. Sure, imitation is the highest form of flattery, but not in publishing. Dan Brown did it already, so I strongly advise you do something else.

Knowing that you’re writing in a saturated category will force you to ask whether your story is unique enough to strike a chord with this particular readership. That can only come from knowing what’s already out there.

Inspiration

I know what it’s like to write a novel, and there was absolutely nothing that could get in the way of my story. It’s because I know my characters inside and out and have a firm grasp on the plot. If you’re that concerned that someone else’s book is going to influence you, then how strong of a writer are you? How committed to the story are you?

These are the questions rolling around the dark caverns of my sometimes-working brain.

Besides, I think authors can gain inspiration from reading their favorite authors. For example, I’ve always loved John Lecroart’s dialog because it’s so real and witty. With a simple keystroke, Lescroart makes his characters come to life because his dialog is that strong. I drew great inspiration from that and worked hard to pattern his style and make it my own. To date, readers always tell me dialog is my strong suit and makes my characters become three dimensional. Had I not read and found inspiration in others’ works, I don’t know where my writing would be.

Someone is going to ask

At some point in your writing career, your book is going to be compared to something else. It’s the way of the industry. If you’re talking to a radio producer and they want a quickie rundown of how your book compares to Eat, Pray, Love, what are you going to say? “Uh, gee, I didn’t read that book.” Ka-thunk. Not only do you look like an idiot, but no one will take you seriously.

The more you know about your competitors, the better able you are to highlight your unique qualities.

So, long story short is this: If you don’t read your competition:

  • You have no way of knowing if you even have a story.
  • You have no way of knowing whether your book is marketable.
  • You have no way of knowing if the genre you’re writing in is heavily impacted.
  • You have no way of knowing the unique qualities of your book.
  • You will piss off any editor who wants title comps.
  • You will greatly embarrass yourself in an interview

Ask yourself whether you’re in this game to win it or to be a grain of sand on a very big beach? Know your competition.


Reporting the news – where’s the responsibility?

August 28, 2010

*Warning – rant time again *

I don’t get it. A vanity press signs a six-year-old kid to a 23 book deal, and the news goes viral. Why? Because the newspaper reporting the deal didn’t do their homework – meaning they had no idea Strategic is a vanity press. But wait, it gets even better…Publisher’s Weekly reported it as well.

Now, I know what you’re thinking – stalwart publications like the Mirror and PW would have something quite snarky about the fact that a vanity press signed a kid barely out of diapers, right? Wrong. Neither publication had any remarks at all. Why? Did they not know? I’m gobsmacked.

Does no one ask questions anymore, or do we have ten-year-olds reporting the news who take everything at face value and haven’t learned the fine art of INVESTIGATION. Didn’t this deal strike these reporting agencies as odd to the point where someone with a firing synapse would ask, “Hmm…what kind of publisher signs a wee bairn to a 23 book deal? Perhaps we should take a closer look at the publisher.”

Where were the editors on this story, asking the tough questions like, “who in their right minds signs a kid? Go back and research.” I mean, that’s what editors do, for beagle’s sake. Instead, people have emailed the Mirror to point out how they missed the fact that Strategic is a scam. Oh! sez the Mirror, big thanks to ye. We will bloody well check that out.

WTF?

Maybe I gave them too much credit and there are no firing synapses at these publications that are responsible for reporting the news. Gives a whole new meaning to “reporting the news,” doesn’t it?

I can almost forgive the Mirror because they don’t specialize in the publishing industry. Mind you, I said almost because it still goes to their responsibility to be an effective reporter – in which they failed beautifully. But Publisher’s Weekly? Wow. Were  their investigative pants in the dryer?

The root of my disgust is how this will impact writers. This news is all over the news and blogosphere and writers are going to naturally check out the publisher. And they’ll query. And they’ll get sucked into the vanity muck because, hey, PW and the Mirror reported it, so it must be legit, right?

And so it goes – another untapped resource opens their wallets and line the pockets of vanity presses who don’t edit, don’t distribute, don’t support. For so many don’ts, they certainly have a captive audience. It’s sad to see so many people believing there are short cuts in this industry and their desire to “be published” outweighs the desire to hone their skills.

I think this story should have absolutely been publicized in order to show how Strategic will stoop at nothing to get some hefty bucks. Sadly, that didn’t happen. Instead, these “news” outlets did nothing to educate the public or protect the unaware. With news like this, it might be better to read comic books.

For a less ranty post, I recommend reading Victoria Strauss’ post at Writer Beware on the subject.


Humility is a good thing

August 27, 2010

I don’t mind being corrected. No, really, it’s true. Well, unless it’s the beagle, and the only thing we ever snarl about is her lack of sobriety and refusal to do any meaningful work.

However, when I receive a query and the subject line is: Searching for an agent, my pea-sized brain thinks the author sent this to me by mistake. And yes, I’m a bit  annoyed because it shows me that the author didn’t stop to even consider who she was querying, or this is a form query letter that she didn’t tailor it  to those she queries. Either way, it’s noobish.

In this particular case, I wrote the author and told her that had she checked us out she’d notice we’re publishers – not a literary agency.

She wrote back and informed me that she’s the author of many books and that she knows full well how it works. Okaaay. So I decided to cut her some slack and read the synop. Errors. Big errors.

Because I was still sipping my morning cuppa and not in official work mode (after all, a girl needs to get her bike ride in first), I looked her up. Gah. Yes, she’d written numerous books. All by….Publish America.

‘Nuff said.

There’s being published – to where an author REALLY knows how it works – and then there’s being pubbed by a vanity press, where one needs to know absolutely nothing.

Getting back to my original statement – I don’t mind being corrected, but I do consider the source. Having a PA author tell me they “know how it works” is like the beagle telling me how to stay sober – like she’d know, right?

The purpose of this post isn’t to finger point at an unfortunate author who suffers from Inflated Egoitis, but to point out that humility is a life preserver. None of us knows everything, and we shouldn’t be above being corrected by those who might know more than we do. After all,shouldn’t we be grateful to those who take time out of their day to provide comment or critique?  ”Tis better to keep your mouth shut and your ears open, not come back with snark.

And for the record…it’s “pen name” – not “pin name.”


Clarity

August 27, 2010

What may be clear as a bell to you may be as cloudy as the beagle’s breath after a weekend bender.

For example -

This is a personal journey. Written in novel form

- makes me wonder whether this is a narrative nonfiction (which reads like a novel), or a novel that’s a personal journey. Normally one would be able to discern this by reading the synopsis. However, if the synopsis covers territory in which I’m unfamiliar, this invites me to consider two options:

  • Go investigate further using my Google-fu
  • Send a form rejection letter

Considering I specialize in nonfiction and have fifty-two queries, five partials, and two fulls awaiting my attention, which do you think I’ll choose?

Clarity: the difference between sailing smooth waters and sinking.


How can agents help – and make us lurve them even more

August 26, 2010

Agents are like the freckles on the beagle’s tummy – they’re all different. I lurve agents and am fortunate to work with some wonderfully talented ones. But there are a number of agents who leave me scratching my head. Many are well-prepared. I really love this and will always clear my desk for them.

Agents need to be good editors

The agents I lurve the most don’t send out a manuscript for query until it’s been edited to within an inch of its little papery life. And it only makes sense, right? You want to make a good impression, so you only send out the best.

The problem is that not every agent is a very good editor. Odd, right? I mean, shouldn’t agents be equally proficient in recognizing when a manuscript is filled with too many passive or run-on sentences, tons of fluff, or POV switches? Other agents do know the difference, but they choose not to take the time to have the author fix it.

Editing = Time

The reason for that is because editing takes time. Lots of time. They have to weigh that time expense against what they’re going to ultimately make on the deal. I know agents who are extremely persnickety about letting anything less than perfect go out. Because their partials are always clean, I always ask for the full. They realize that while it may not end up being cost effective to make the author edit the ms so that it’s ready to shoot out the door, it goes along with their stellar reputation.

In this day and age, everyone needs to consider the law of diminishing returns. Most editors are no longer taking the time for the huge edit jobs – well most of us aren’t. I still get way too involved if I love the story. But we pass because there is so much out there to choose from – truly a buyer’s market. The cleaner manuscripts/better stories rise to the top while the big edit jobs may sink.

Agents know this and have become pickier as well because preparing their client’s edits falls on their shoulders.  I’ve known agents who brought in outside editors to prep a manuscript for query. They do this because they feel certain the payoff will more than warrant the special attention.

And that’s a downside is for editors because we don’t realize the author isn’t the proficient writer we thought they were. This can make editing a real eye opener – and not in a good way. The upside is that, hopefully, editing will be minimal and no one will be any the wiser.

A warning to you – the author

You may receive a rejection letter that says, “Love the story, needs to be thoroughly edited.” If so, that’s mana from heaven and take steps to have another set of eyes brush through your manuscript to look for those warts. More likely you’ll get a form rejection letter. It’s sad because you’ll never know what sunk you.

If you want to avoid the pitfalls of “death by lack of editing” then you have to know the rudiments of writing. You may have a fabulous story in you, but you’ll remain unpublished because you had too much fluff, or passive voice, or any number of fatal injuries.

Or…you may get with an agent who doesn’t know or doesn’t care, and queries you out unedited. The result is that your bargaining power is greatly diminished because the editor will point out the vast amount of editing required. Should you be in this position, your choices are death by editor through countless rejections or, should you actually get signed, a death wish from your editor.

It grates on my last nerve to sign an author who needs a boatload of editing. And really, I have no one to blame but myself, but I can’t help but wonder why on earth the agent didn’t do something about this in the first place. And you know what? I’ll be less inclined to take that agent’s queries less seriously the next time around.

Protect yourself and make sure your manuscript has been edited into fabulosity. This will make everyone sing and do the joy joy dance.


PW review sellout – goin’ K-Mart

August 25, 2010

**Warning** this is a rant

Profit center…the magic words that delight the bean counters who worry about keeping the lights on. It’s a fact that magazines are hurting. Many have closed their doors, shuttered their windows and gone home. Others are looking for ways to increase their bottom line in order to keep the wolves at bay.

I’ve had the annoying encounter of being invited to PAY for a friggin’ review by a magazine, which I politely demurred (no, really, I was polite)… to which the editor came back at me with slings and arrows for not taking out ad space in her mag – something she’s done to numerous other publishers. As long there is breath in my lungs, I will never send them another ARC.

Ok, so we have mags making money off of paid reviews, or blackmailing publishers into taking out ads. But now we have the illustrious Publishers Weekly writing a soppy “we lurve you self pubbies” article that offers to list self pubbed books for $149. What squeezes the jam out of my jelly doughnut is that self pubbed authors will FLOCK at this chance in the mistaken belief that this will sell books.

It.
Does.
Not.

Nothing sells book other than creating demand, and that requires distribution, marketing, promotion, and a damn good book. Many, many self pubbed books aren’t damn good. Most aren’t anywhere near good. They’re raw, green, unschooled, poorly written things that need a lot of work. So authors are going to see the offer and think, “PW? Myohmy, hello fame and fortune!” and put good money after bad.

Sorry, but I think it’s irresponsible of PW to stoop this low. I realize magazines need to stay in business, but the self pubbed author is especially vulnerable to all kinds of riff raff because they have no advocate. And it makes me cranky. It also makes me cranky that a magazine that has worked very hard to become the premier pubby magazine in the industry has gone K-Mart.

Why now, PW? You’ve ignored self pubbed authors for all these years, refusing to review or acknowledge their existence, but by gollygosh when your own bottom line looks a bit too red, what do you do? Prey on the very group you’ve disdained for years. Meh. It makes me choke on my margarita because little good will come of this.

And you know what? This disturbing trend that PW, Kirkus, ForeWord, and others are buying into will change the face of reviews. They are cheapening themselves and selling out while great review sites like BiblioBuffet rock it by maintaining their integrity and dignity.

Self pubbers – save your money and use it for your promotion instead.

I couldn’t be more disappointed.


Writer’s responsibility

August 24, 2010

Note: I’ve survived my first day as an official Tweeter (@behlerpublish) without risk to life or sanity (sanity flew out the door eons ago), so I feel it my duty to report that I have yet to put a contract out on that Morgan woman’s life. I can say that I didn’t do anything worthwhile all yesterday got lots of work done and was quite productive in spite of the temptation to twit my tweet. Now on to my regular blog post…

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I’m having a sudden flashback on what I always overhear at every writer’s conference: “Why should I bother with learning the writing rudiments when my editor will fix it?”

Run me through with the horn of  a rhino.

Please.

As we all know, the writers who feel this way will have a much harder time finding  a publishing deal because they probably don’t have a firm grasp on how much they don’t know. What’s worse is they don’t care.

Step 1: Listen

Let’s just say that our noob (people who don’t know what they don’t know, and don’t care) writer got that pubby deal and is now in the firm grasp of his editor – yah, the one holding the bloody red pen and the pointy end is aimed squarely at the manuscript. What’s the next step?

While she is editing, she may give our intrepid friend some feedback. Maybe something along the lines of, “Sorry this is taking longer than I’d planned.”

So what does that mean? Could be that she’s handling several fires at the moment, and the entire process is taking longer than planned for. It happens all the time. I’ve had to sideline twice because I had a barnburner that had a fast release date. It doesn’t mean that the sidelined manuscript is any the less important. It’s strictly business, and there’s no need to begin mainlining gin.

But there are other things to listen for. If you have a chatty editor, they may drop the “oy vey, this is going to take more work than I thought.” Ok, we try very hard never to say stuff like that, but we think it a lot. We get surprised at times. Sure, we read the manuscript, but there’s a bit of time that passes before we actually get to editing the project. We may have lurved the book – and still do – but once we get into the nuts and bolts we see how extensive the editing job will be.

Step 2: Listen, read, and learn

What normally happens is that you’ll get your edits back with a few pages of critiques and your file that’s marked with comments off to the side, suggested rewrites, and other dabblings that have been inserted into your manuscript.

Read those critiques like they are a map to finding the holy grail – because in a manner of speaking, it is.

If you see comments like:

There are a lot of sentence fragments – that’s an indication that you need to go through your manuscript and look for those fragments. Mind you,fragments totally work, but just like the beagle’s penchant for margaritas, too much of a good thing can ruin the party. Weed them down to a manageable number so they soften the flow. And that means you need to know how to recognize a sentence fragment. Your editor will – or should – give examples so you can look for those little law breakers. Don’t be afraid to ask questions.

There are tons of passive sentences – Again, a passive sentence here or there, properly written is fine. But if one is whacked over the head, that means there’s a problem.

The long and short of this is that your editor has pointed out some writing weaknesses. Chances are that those weaknesses aren’t just little mistakes, but something that puts a hole in your writing. The idea is to learn from these crits and improve.

I’ve had instances where authors have thanked me for the crits and proceeded not to take a proactive stance with those crits. They only worked on the things I’d specifically pointed out in the manuscript. Editors are not going to point out every single passive sentence or fragment. What ends up happening is that editing time now doubles because I have to go back and either fix them myself or point them out because I realize the author doesn’t get it. It’s head bangy stuff.

Step 3: Be proactive and be loved

If you take a proactive stance and read those pages of crits – because we don’t write them for our health – and re-read your manuscript with those comments in mind, you’ll not only learn from your mistakes but you’ll earn the everlasting love from your editor.

Editing can be a tough experience, and authors really set the tone as to how well or agonizing it will be. Many of us mutter, “I love this book and this author’s writing, but I’ll think twice about taking on their second book.”

This is not what you want your editor to say. Evah. Take total responsibility for your writing at every turn.


Aggghhh…I’ve joined the twits

August 23, 2010

I blame Nicola Morgan for this sudden departure from managing my time with an iron fist. Now I’m doomed to be worthless as I will undoubtedly get sucked into the great Twitter vortex. Someone toss me a rope. FAST! Otherwise, you can find me over at @behlerpublish.

Morgan, you’re toast.


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