Hook and Title

At the writer’s conference this past weekend, I noticed a consistent problem with the authors I spoke to: lack of a hook and titles choices. Oddly enough, both go hand in hand in that they are designed to capture readers’ attention.


After reading author’s pages, reading their synops, and talking to them, I found myself asking, “yabut, what’s your hook?” And this is where the struggle began because I was basically asking them to justify the viability of their book.

A hook, simply put is a point in a story that grabs the reader’s attention. It’s the difference between mundane and exciting. Your hook is tied into your plot, which should have some sort of struggle going on (conflict).

For example, I spoke with one author whose full I’d read a while back. I liked the story but felt there wasn’t a big enough hook to draw in readers. It was about the life of a beleaguered principal who faces a group of unruly teachers. The problem was that nothing was really happening. The unruly teachers is the foundation – the starting point of her plot – but she needed to have a hook, that sit-up-and-take-notice grabber. So we talked over breakfast (another great reason to attend conferences), where she told me her MC was frustrated at not being able to fire the teachers.

Ah ha.

So his ultimate struggle isn’t with the teachers, but a deeper, immovable object. The teachers are the foundation, but that personal struggle gets exhausted pretty fast, and she can’t sustain that for an entire book. However, if the MC decides to take on the teacher’s union, NOW you’re talking a hook. She was aghast. “It’s so controversial,” she said, fanning herself with her napkin. “Exactamundo,” I replied. “Never, ever fear controversy – it sells, baby.”

Controversy is a fabulous hook because it gets people talking, discussing the issues. Even though her book is fiction, the book is steeped in truth. Additionally, she has a terrific platform of thirty-five years in the classroom (now retired), and a platform means publicity. With the current strife going on in various states about unions, hers is a very timely book – and she is right smack dab in the middle of it. Now I’m seeing radio interviews, TV appearances, and personal appearances because there is nothing on the market like this book, and her perspective is quite unique.

This book was going nowhere fast – yet a short breakfast together turned that all around. Yah, hook is that important.

So take a long, objective look at your book. Can you determine what your hook is? Is it big enough? Are there controversial elements that you can exploit? Can you confidently answer the question, “What makes your book viable and unique?”


Equally important to capturing attention is your book’s title. I saw quite a few misfires this past weekend. If I can’t guess the genre based on the title, then it could be a title misfire. If you’re writing nonfiction, your title should be clear and adequately describe the book’s content. And, of course, be catchy.

I had a one-on-one with an author whose title and subtitle made me think it was Self Help. Her pitch, however, made it clear it was a memoir. The first thing I did was suggest a new title that personalized her book. Oddly enough, when we began discussing title options, it actually began to alter the focus of the book from memoir to possibly Travel Essay. Funny how a simple thing (and, in truth, there is nothing simple about titles) can change your book’s perspective. Titles be powerful things.

Recently we had title changes on two of our books. Our sales folks felt the original titles lacked power and clarity. Above all, a title needs to set the tone for the book. Our first book was titled Anomaly. I’d really waffled on it at the outset because I knew there would be a populace who (sadly) didn’t know what anomaly meant. And who or what is the anomaly? The cover art wasn’t enough to identify what the book was about. In short, the title had to go.

So we noodled around with different titles. The sales and marketing folks asked me the gist of the story. “Well, it’s about Chris Baughman, a dedicated and passionate detective, who leads a special unit whose job it is to take pimps off the street – knocking off the head of the beast by arresting them, bankrupting them, and seizing their millions of dollars of assets. But he goes a step further by taking the girls off the street and putting them in touch with professionals who can get them into shelters, school, etc.”

“So,” they said, “it’s Off the Street.”


Our second title was originally called Violence: The underbelly of the National Football League. I thought it a powerful title, but after talking to author and former Tampa Bay Buccaneers president Gay Culverhouse about the scope of her book, I felt the title didn’t adequately describe the content. Neither did the sales and marketing folks. So after long talk, whammo, presto change-o, the title became Throwaway Players: Concussion crisis from PeeWee football to the NFL.

And don’t be afraid to use a subtitle…especially with nonfiction. Publishers have all sorts of tricks to get the point across. You’ll note that Off the Street doesn’t have a subtitle, but if you look at the cover art, you’ll see that we added a byline: “prostitution is not a victimless crime.” This tells readers exactly what the book is about in a matter of nanoseconds.

And this is what you’re looking for; a catchy title that describes the book.

Obviously, fiction offers more freedom to be artistic and vague – but personally, it drives me nuts when I can’t glean the contents from the title and cover art. So choose your catchy title with care. It should be representative of the book, not too obscure, and, of course, catchy.

Sadly, there is no formula to a great title, so it’s a lot of trial and error. And feedback.

And don’t freak if your agent or editor changes the title. They’re not doing it to ruin your day, but to make the book more marketable, memorable. I can’t tell you the number of times I’ve read advanced submissions to books with weak titles, yet there, among the pages, I noticed a much more powerful title  lurking about.

There is nothing sweeter than being able to suggest a new title that excites the author. Am I brilliant? Ah, I’d like to think so, but alas, it’s only because I’m an unbiased observer and can see things the author can’t.

If you find yourself stumped with a title, go no further than your manuscript. The answer is in there. Really. It makes no sense, but I do get excited when a query comes in with a great title. Right or wrong, I think that if the author thought up a great title, the content must be equally amazing. And that, my dear writers, is the same psychology that attracts readers.

So don’t downplay the importance of Hook and Title. They are the face of your book. Considering the plethora of great books running about, you can’t afford to take shortcuts.

7 Responses to Hook and Title

  1. NinjaFingers says:

    Sometimes the title comes easily.

    Other times…I hate titles.

  2. Frank Mazur says:

    “… and her perspective is quite unique.”

    Based on the little you wrote, sounds to me at least, like more hammering of teachers and teacher unions. Nothing unique about that, particularly in today’s environment and going back a decade and more—even if it comes from someone retired from the classroom after more than thirty years AND who may not have joined a union. Here’s a link t concerning the overall subject of teachers and our culture’s’ view of them that’s worth a look…


  3. Frank, I didn’t use this example to invite a political debate, but rather to discuss the importance of creating a hook and the effective use of controversy to create that hook. You don’t have to agree with it.

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  5. galitbreen says:

    This was an excellent post so chock full of tips that (Do I dare admit?!) I took notes! Thanks so much for the tips and real examples!

    And for the record: As a former teacher a mom, that principal-union book? Genius!

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